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Group Poem XVI

Posted: Fri May 31, 2013 5:24 pm
by Audiendus
This will be a poem about photography – its history, current state, types, features, social effects etc, together with any personal views, recollections, anecdotes or witticisms.

It will be of 20 lines, in iambic pentameter, rhyming ABAB CDCD EFEF GHGH IJIJ. As the early history of photography is particularly associated with Frenchmen – e.g. Niépce and Daguerre – line 1 and every third line thereafter (i.e. lines 1, 4, 7, 10, 13, 16 and 19) shall include a French word/phrase commonly used in English. This should be shown in bold.

Here are the title and first line:

THE CAMERA

Technology has made us all blasé

Re: Group Poem XVI

Posted: Fri May 31, 2013 10:20 pm
by saparris
THE CAMERA

Technology has made us all blasé
About the nature of photography

Re: Group Poem XVI

Posted: Sat Jun 01, 2013 8:50 am
by Audiendus
THE CAMERA

Technology has made us all blasé
About the nature of photography
The old flash powder, plate and darkroom tray

Re: Group Poem XVI

Posted: Sat Jun 01, 2013 10:50 am
by saparris
THE CAMERA

Technology has made us all blasé
About the nature of photography
The old flash powder, plate and darkroom tray
Are now the bric-à-brac of memory

Re: Group Poem XVI

Posted: Sat Jun 01, 2013 4:03 pm
by Perry Lassiter
Then film came next along the trek

Re: Group Poem XVI

Posted: Sat Jun 01, 2013 8:52 pm
by LukeJavan8
THE CAMERA

Technology has made us all blasé
About the nature of photography
The old flash powder, plate and darkroom tray
Are now the bric-à-brac of memory
Then film came next along the trek
Pushed the most by Eastman Kodak

Re: Group Poem XVI

Posted: Sat Jun 01, 2013 11:14 pm
by Perry Lassiter
THE CAMERA

Technology has made us all blasé
About the nature of photography
The old flash powder, plate and darkroom tray
Are now the bric-à-brac of memory

Then film came next along the trek
Pushed the most by Eastman Kodak
Dont le film made the rest a wreck,

Re: Group Poem XVI

Posted: Sun Jun 02, 2013 9:39 am
by saparris
Note: Before you add a line, please check to be sure that it is in iambic pentameter, which has 5 stresses (da DUM da DUM da DUM da DUM da DUM). Iambic pentameter occasionally drops an unstressed beat, as in the new line below, but alway has five beats).

THE CAMERA

Technology has made us all blasé
About the nature of photography
The old flash powder, plate and darkroom tray
Are now the bric-à-brac of memory

Then film came next along the trek
Pushed the most by Eastman Kodak
Dont le film made the rest a wreck
(AU-di-EN-dus, GET us BACK on TRACK)

Re: Group Poem XVI

Posted: Sun Jun 02, 2013 10:03 am
by Audiendus
THE CAMERA

Technology has made us all blasé
About the nature of photography
The old flash powder, plate and darkroom tray
Are now the bric-à-brac of memory

Then film came next along the trek
Pushed the most by Eastman Kodak
Dont le film made the rest a wreck
(AU-di-EN-dus, GET us BACK on TRACK)

That magic box of wood or Bakelite

Re: Group Poem XVI

Posted: Sun Jun 02, 2013 11:08 am
by saparris
THE CAMERA

Technology has made us all blasé
About the nature of photography
The old flash powder, plate and darkroom tray
Are now the bric-à-brac of memory

Then film came next along the trek
Pushed the most by Eastman Kodak
Dont le film made the rest a wreck
(AU-di-EN-dus, GET us BACK on TRACK)

That magic box of wood or Bakelite
Could capture our best moments contre-jour

Re: Group Poem XVI

Posted: Sun Jun 02, 2013 1:21 pm
by Audiendus
I have also changed the eighth line:

THE CAMERA

Technology has made us all blasé
About the nature of photography
The old flash powder, plate and darkroom tray
Are now the bric-à-brac of memory

Then film came next along the trek
Pushed the most by Eastman Kodak
Dont le film made the rest a wreck
And polychrome trumped white-and-black.

That magic box of wood or Bakelite
Could capture our best moments contre-jour
But lacked a meter to decide how bright

Re: Group Poem XVI

Posted: Sun Jun 02, 2013 2:02 pm
by saparris
THE CAMERA

Technology has made us all blasé
About the nature of photography
The old flash powder, plate and darkroom tray
Are now the bric-à-brac of memory

Then film came next along the trek
Pushed the most by Eastman Kodak
Dont le film made the rest a wreck
And polychrome trumped white-and-black.

That magic box of wood or Bakelite
Could capture our best moments contre-jour
But lacked a meter to decide how bright
The light should be to make the image sure

Re: Group Poem XVI

Posted: Sun Jun 02, 2013 4:18 pm
by Audiendus
For the sake of symmetry, I have decided to make the fourth stanza 8 syllables per line, like the second.

THE CAMERA

Technology has made us all blasé
About the nature of photography
The old flash powder, plate and darkroom tray
Are now the bric-à-brac of memory

Then film came next along the trek
Pushed the most by Eastman Kodak
Dont le film made the rest a wreck
And polychrome trumped white-and-black.

That magic box of wood or Bakelite
Could capture our best moments contre-jour
But lacked a meter to decide how bright
The light should be to make the image sure

These days no add-on is de trop

Re: Group Poem XVI

Posted: Sun Jun 02, 2013 7:41 pm
by saparris
THE CAMERA

Technology has made us all blasé
About the nature of photography
The old flash powder, plate and darkroom tray
Are now the bric-à-brac of memory

Then film came next along the trek
Pushed the most by Eastman Kodak
Dont le film made the rest a wreck
And polychrome trumped white-and-black.

That magic box of wood or Bakelite
Could capture our best moments contre-jour
But lacked a meter to decide how bright
The light should be to make the image sure

These days no add-on is de trop
Cases, lenses—on and on

Re: Group Poem XVI

Posted: Sun Jun 02, 2013 10:18 pm
by LukeJavan8
THE CAMERA

Technology has made us all blasé
About the nature of photography
The old flash powder, plate and darkroom tray
Are now the bric-à-brac of memory

Then film came next along the trek
Pushed the most by Eastman Kodak
Dont le film made the rest a wreck
And polychrome trumped white-and-black.

That magic box of wood or Bakelite
Could capture our best moments contre-jour
But lacked a meter to decide how bright
The light should be to make the image sure

These days no add-on is de trop
Cases, lenses—on and on
Replaced by cellphones alas and alack